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The graphs illustrate
that
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apply
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the number of travellers
to visit in
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visiting
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 the
UK
 and
UK
 citizens
to trip
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going
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abroads
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abroad
 from 1979 to 1999.
Overall
, figures that tourists travelling in the
UK
 and
UK
 public stopping by overseas were increased for two decades. Plus, most of the
UK
 people tripped several nations(Turkey, Greece, USA, Spain and France)
To begin
 with, the number of
UK
 citizens
to visit
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visiting
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 other nations was
mildly
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slightly
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 raised between 1979 and 1987, but it was dramatically up from 1979 to 1989, after that, it consistently
grown
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grew
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 to 55
million
 by 1999.
Additionally
, the volume of overseas tourists was slightly elevated from 10
million
 to 23
million
.
Moreover
, the majority of the
UK
 public came over France to 14.5
million
,
this
 was the highest number,
conversely
, they went to Turkey to 0.2
million
 and they dropped by Greece(0.35
million
), USA(0.4
million
), and Spain(13.5
million
)
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