In many countries government spend a lot of money on arts. However, some think government should spend more on health and education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The world has been facing problems from all over sectors
especially
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, especially
health
and education
, people
argue that national fund
should Fix the agreement mistake
funds
be allocate
for that. Meanwhile, in some Change the verb form
be allocated
countries
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countries,
government
intend to be a curator of art
. I do believe that government
have Correct article usage
the government
a
mandatory spending for Remove the article
apply
health
and education
, while
art
can be the a
part of Choose an article
a
education
.
Firstly
, Health
and education
entails to
be Verb problem
must
reckoned as
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considered
a
human Correct article usage
apply
right
. The disparities among Fix the agreement mistake
rights
people
for opting
school or Verb problem
apply
hospital
because the limitation of budgeting should be eliminated by Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
government
, it rambles to see Correct article usage
the government
the
poor Correct your spelling
that
people
can't derive a high level education
. Change preposition
of education
For instance
, in Indonesia
there is a Add a comma
Indonesia,
government
program Correct pronoun usage
that exhibites
exhibites
a Correct your spelling
exhibits
exhibited
free-payment
for all to have a seat Correct your spelling
free payment
on
national Change preposition
in
school
. The Fix the agreement mistake
schools
free of charges
program had decreased evidently the number of illiterate Correct your spelling
free-of-charge
people
for
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by
approximetaly
30%. Correct your spelling
approximately
However
, art
also
contain
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contains
capitivating
materials that Correct your spelling
captivating
necessary
for the younger generation.
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are necessary
Secondly
, providing art
can be included on
the Change preposition
in
education
syllabus. Some professional
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professionals
said
that learning by doing is the best way of studying. Take history subject as an example, it would be easier for Wrong verb form
say
teacher
to instil the story of Diponegoro the Indonesian Hero by looking at the Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
art
painted by Raden Saleh. Not only count as a new way of study but also
it is intriguing material for young people
that
never have Correct pronoun usage
who
a
opportunity to see a painting that Change the article
an
only
displayed Add a missing verb
is only
on
the National Palace.
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in
To sum up
, nations all over the globe spend a lot of people
's tax to acquire art
while
it is needed urgently to solve pivotal problems. I believe that to deal with Correct word choice
apply
education
and health
,
and treat them as a human right with no disparity among Remove the comma
apply
people
is a priority while
art
can be included as a part of studying material.Submitted by sifa.herdini on
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