In many countries government spend a lot of money on arts. However, some think government should spend more on health and education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The world has been facing problems from all over sectors

especially

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health

and

education

,

people

argue that national

fund

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should

be allocate

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for that. Meanwhile, in some

countries

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countries,

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government

intend to be a curator of

art

. I do believe that

government

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the government

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have

a

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mandatory spending for

health

and

education

,

while

art

can be

the a

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part of

education

.

Firstly

,

Health

and

education

entails to

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be

reckoned as

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considered

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a

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apply

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human

right

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rights

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. The disparities among

people

for

opting

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school or

hospital

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hospitals

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because the limitation of budgeting should be eliminated by

government

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the government

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, it rambles to see

the

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that

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poor

people

can't derive a high level

education

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of education

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.

For instance

, in

Indonesia

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Indonesia,

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there is a

government

program

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that exhibites

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exhibites

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exhibits

exhibited

a

free-payment

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for all to have a seat

on

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national

school

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schools

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. The

free of charges

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program had decreased evidently the number of illiterate

people

for

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by

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approximetaly

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approximately

30%.

However

,

art

also

contain

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capitivating

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captivating

materials that

necessary

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are necessary

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for the younger generation.

Secondly

, providing

art

can be included

on

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the

education

syllabus. Some

professional

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professionals

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said

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say

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that learning by doing is the best way of studying. Take history subject as an example, it would be easier for

teacher

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teachers

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to instil the story of Diponegoro the Indonesian Hero by looking at the

art

painted by Raden Saleh. Not only count as a new way of study but

also

it is intriguing material for young

people

that

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never have

a

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opportunity to see a painting that

only

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displayed

on

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the National Palace.

To sum up

, nations all over the globe spend a lot of

people

's tax to acquire

art

while

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apply

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it is needed urgently to solve pivotal problems. I believe that to deal with

education

and

health

,

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and treat them as a human right with no disparity among

people

is a priority

while

art

can be included as a part of studying material.