In many countries government spend a lot of money on arts. However, some think government should spend more on health and education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The world has been facing problems from all over sectors

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health

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and

education

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people

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argue that national

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for that. Meanwhile, in some

countries

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government

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intend to be a curator of

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. I do believe that

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government

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mandatory spending for

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art

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part of

education

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entails to

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human

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. The disparities among

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for

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school or

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hospitals

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because the limitation of budgeting should be eliminated by

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, it rambles to see

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poor

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can't derive a high level

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education

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Indonesia

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there is a

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program

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for all to have a seat

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national

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program had decreased evidently the number of illiterate

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approximetaly

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approximately

30%.

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also

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capitivating

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captivating

materials that

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for the younger generation.

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the

education

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syllabus. Some

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said

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that learning by doing is the best way of studying. Take history subject as an example, it would be easier for

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teachers

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to instil the story of Diponegoro the Indonesian Hero by looking at the

art

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painted by Raden Saleh. Not only count as a new way of study but

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it is intriguing material for young

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never have

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opportunity to see a painting that

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displayed

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the National Palace.

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, nations all over the globe spend a lot of

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's tax to acquire

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it is needed urgently to solve pivotal problems. I believe that to deal with

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and

health

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and treat them as a human right with no disparity among

people

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is a priority

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art

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can be included as a part of studying material.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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allocation of funds
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public expenditure
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economic growth
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public-private partnership
fiscal responsibility
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underprivileged communities
life expectancy
technological advancements
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