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In many countries, government spent large sum of money on the arts, and this is supported by some taxpayers as both why. Other, however, think that this money would be better spent on health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is an argument whether national politics should outley more budget on health and education
instead
 of spending it on the
arts
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 extent. From the viewpoint of agreement, the idea can be thought
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a
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 much more rational and realistic without
dought
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. Health is a matter
with
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 human lives and education is
critical
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a critical
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 factor to
develope
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developing
 the worldwide society, so both are
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crucial
critical
on
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 comparison with the
arts
.
On the contrary
, with no doubt, the
arts
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 for some civilizations, and the job tends to be difficult to make a living.
For
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 reason, there is a
neccesity
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necessity
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 more
economical
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 support in
this
 area. In my opinion, governments could decrease the proportion of money on the
arts
 because it is possible for artists to earn profits
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 other jobs than
arts
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, but
illuness
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ill
 people need to pay
big
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 amount of money as soon as possible sometimes depending on their health situation. And there is no way to overcome the
taff
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staff
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 situation except for
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governments'
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 support.
This
 is why I advocate the agreement with the statement.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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