The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of the population in
Philippines
, Correct article usage
the Philippines
Malaysia
, Thailand
, and Indonesia
living in urban areas between 1970 and 2020 and gives future expactations
for 2030 and 2040.
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expectations
Overall
, all countries showed upward trends until today and continue to increase
number
of Change the article
the number
people
who live in cities rest of the given period. Malaysia
,
showed the most significant Remove the comma
apply
increase
.
In 1970, nearly 30% of people
were
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live
in cities in Replace the word
lived
Malaysia
and Philippines
. Correct article usage
the Philippines
Similarly
, they saw rise
in Correct article usage
a rise
until
1990 Change preposition
apply
with
reaching Change preposition
apply
to
above 50%. Change preposition
apply
While
,
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apply
Malaysia
showed sharp
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a sharp
increase
and reached to
below 80% in 2023, Change preposition
apply
Philippines
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the Philippines
expreinced fluctation
in the same period. Correct your spelling
experienced fluctuation
Similarly
, Thailand
and Indonesia
showed similar increase
trajectory
from 18% and 12% to 30% and 25%, respectively between 1970 to 1990. Fix the agreement mistake
trajectories
Although
,
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apply
Thailand
remained stable until today, more people
move
to Wrong verb form
moved
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the city
a city
city
in Fix the agreement mistake
cities
Indonesia
and reached to
nearly more than half of Change preposition
apply
population
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the population
who
lives in urban areas.
Future predictions indicate steady increases for all countries. More than 80% of Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
will move from rural areas to city
centers in Malaysia
and more than half of people
will live in city
in Fix the agreement mistake
cities
Philippines
and Correct article usage
the Philippines
Indonesia
in 2040. Lastly
, less than 40% of Thailand
citizens will continue to sustain their life
in Fix the agreement mistake
lives
city
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the city
after
eighteen yearsChange preposition
for
later
.Rephrase
apply
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