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Some students travel abroad for one year before starting university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

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People study overseas
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 of greener pastures,over the years the number of students who migrate abroad
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 increasing, a part of students go a year early to the country that they wish to study
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 is highly beneficial because you will get to be familiar with the country before studies,you can
also
 learn rules and
language
 for that specific place
however
 leaving early can
also
 be stressful as one has more idle
time
 which leads to missing home The idea of leaving home a year early is highly beneficial only if you are going to a country which speaks a
language
 you are not aware of,
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 one is going to be aware from loved ones for a very long period of
time
for example
 if the degree is for 4 years it means the stay will
last
 for 5years
Although
 learning a new
language
 can be difficult and tiring the good part of it is that there will be ample
time
 to do that and there is no interference with school work which gives you more
time
 just to focus on the
language
 Getting a job is another advantage of travelling abroad
year
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 before your studies,
for
instance
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 if you are paying for your own tuition fees you will get enough
time
 to work and save
although
this
 requires someone to be very disciplined and to watch spending habits
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there are many advantages of going abroad early before your studies despite being away from family for a long
time
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