Pie charts shows the electricity production in France and Australia in 1980 and 2000.

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The pie chart below provides information about the percentage of electricity production between France and Australia in 1980 and 2000.

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, as is shown in the figure Australia had Coal more than all of the other sources

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France had an almost equal amount of sources.

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, both countries have changed in the past years.

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, Australia's pie chart shows 50 of 100

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of Coal in 1980, which increased to 130 out of 170

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in 2000.

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, Oil was 10

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of 100 in 1980

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downward till 2

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of 170 in 2000 and Natural Gas was 20

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and ended up the same.

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, the Hydro Power was 20

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of 100 in 1980

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and increased to 36

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in 2000.

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, in 1980 the France pie chart has the same percentage for Coal and Natural gas which is 25

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of 90 but only Natural Gas changed to Low race to 2

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of 180 in 2000.

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, Coal hasn't experienced any changes .

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

170 words

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Pie charts shows the electricity production in France and Australia in 1980 and 2000.

Many young people today change their jobs or careers every few years. Do you think this has more advantages than disadvantages?

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

More people will work from home and more students will study at home if computer technology becomes cheap and accessible. What will be the advantages and disadvantages if this happens?

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after graduating from high school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.