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SOME PEOPLE PREFER TO SPEND THEIR LIVES DOING THE SAME THINGS AND AVOIDING CHANGE.OTHERS,HOWEVER,THINK THAT CHANGE IS ALWAYS A GOOD THING. DICUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

#people #lives #change #dicuss
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 a crucial role in their life,
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, others opine
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 becoming changes in their life must be required for the folks. In
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 a lot of experience in their life,
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, if some changes occur in their community so people would not feel
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boring
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 in the same location where people can get
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 of experience in their fields
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 they can not only get
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their brain
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worker
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are taking not only
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 salary
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in spite
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opportunity
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 to the citizens like if crowd
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distinguish
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 place in order to that they get
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 amount of money without any issues.
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 where they learn different skills
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think that they can get hilarious
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environment
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, even though,
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 provides experience
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 in one special field,
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 community gives different
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staff like taking huge revenue from their employees.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preference
  • routine
  • familiarity
  • comfort zone
  • consistency
  • stability
  • security
  • fear
  • uncertainty
  • novelty
  • growth
  • adaptability
  • progress
  • flexibility
  • diversity
  • opportunities
  • personal development
  • open-mindedness
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