Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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growing
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field
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individuals
are
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crucial
and their existence may add
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a lot especially
due to
their experience, that's why some people think that replacing them with young ones may bring
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of harm, I
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totally
disagree with the
last
perspective. On the one hand, more experienced
workers
may have
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to
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, an old worker in agriculture would be able to manage a problem with a specific machine and find the exact solution in few moments and without any difficulties. That will improve the fluency of the work and other
workers
will feel more confident
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because
they know that there always be an experienced one to deal with
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. On the other
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hand
, these
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elderly
older
workers
are less healthy and will be less strong physically than the
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.
Industry
, usually, demands
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sufficient
strength,
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nevertheless
, young
workers
are
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supposed
to be with better fullmindness than older ones.
For instance
, working in
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industry
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good mental ability and concentration to use the exact type and amount of different
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materials
,
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my opinion will be performed better by fresh,
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.
To conclude
, I think that old
workers
are
such
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and their
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existence
is
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crucial
, but
youngesters
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youngsters
are the future energy and
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institutions
should
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their best in order to encourage them to
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achieve
their
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • experienced
  • old workers
  • young
  • inexperienced
  • replace
  • industry
  • wise
  • argue
  • valuable
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • loss of expertise
  • lack
  • necessary
  • experience
  • maturity
  • diverse
  • workforce
  • mix
  • age groups
  • beneficial
  • focus
  • providing opportunities
  • continuous learning
  • development
  • balanced approach
  • smooth transition
  • maintain productivity
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