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Band 2

Some people think that education and healthcare should be free of charge and funded by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
Education and healthcare are the most important facilities for
people
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 that some of them think they should be free for humane and
baied
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based
baked
bailed
 by government. In
this
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statement
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statement,
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 we will
disscus
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discuss
 why
government
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the government
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 ought to offer these
service
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services
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free
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for free
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. I think it is better for
citizen
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citizens
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.
Body · 1
Meanwhile,
government
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the government
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 for
citizen
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citizens
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is look
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looks
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 like
parent
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a parent
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for
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to
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 family. They have to care
all
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for all
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 bodies.
Consequntly
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Consequently
, authors have the main power and
extrem
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extreme
 ability to support everyone.
People
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 live in
country
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the country
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 and work
hardly
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hard
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 to
raised
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raise
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 their place. They
strugle
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struggle
 to help
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
to
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apply
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protect their land.
Body · 2
So, they deserve to
gain
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have
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 a good life.
This
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 can be when
accessebility
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accessibility
 to
needs
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needs to
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 be
easly
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easily
 for them. Learning at school or university and medical care should be unpaid. These are the most
requirment
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requirements
 to feel
safety
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safe
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at
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in
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place
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the place
a place
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.
Conclusion
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, a good life in
country
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the country
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 is made by
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
helping
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help
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.
Which
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This
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 means
people
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 who live in
relax
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relaxed
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 environment
they
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apply
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become happy and
ambtious
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ambitious
 to serve their place .
As some
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Some
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people
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 think
people
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meit to
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must
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 have
worthy
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a worthy
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 life by
gain
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gaining
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 the most necessary
requirment
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requirements
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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