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In some countries, men and women are having children at later age than in the past. What are the reasons for this development ? Do advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

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These days people
having
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children
 at a later
age
. So, some people think that having babies at a younger
age
 is better,
while
 others believe that having babies at an older
age
 is better.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On one hand, having
children
 at a younger
age
 is crucial for the
parents
 and
children
.
For example
, to be more understandable because of the closer
age
. So, that's why some think that it is the best thing to do.
On the other hand
, giving birth at a later
age
 is better for both
children
 and
parents
. For
an
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instance, to be mentally prepared and
also
 to be stable and to have more money.
This
 proves clearly that
parents
 should have
children
 when they are old enough. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both points
view
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, I believe that the best time for having kids is after thirty because
,
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parents
 will have more experience in life and
also
 they will be in a high position in their careers.
However
, I believe that there is nothing better than
other
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others
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 as long as they are understanding and caring for their
children
.
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