Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, air polution and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations. Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
present world, flying many
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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is negatively impacting the environment through noise pollution. Nations are constructing more airports, which makes proponents suggest
taxes
on flight fares should be made more expensive as a means of solving the above problem. I do not agree with
this
.
To begin
with, holidays are an essential part of our lives;
therefore
,
traveling
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travelling
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for long hours can negatively impact our journey.
For example
,
people
who have diseases involving the backbone cannot go to areas that are far from their homes.
This
can lead to the fact that a
lot
of
people
, especially older
people
, prevent visiting beautiful places. It is beneficial for
people
to have meaningful holidays without expensive
taxes
.
On the other hand
, low-income families cannot visit their big families. To illustrate, a
lot
of
people
who live in developing nations tend to come to developed countries to work.
Due to
the expensive tax on
air
traffic, these workers cannot come from their
hometown
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in order to visit their families.
For instance
, there are a
lot
of Vietnamese working in nearby nations
such
as Japan and Korea
just
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who just
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go back home during Tet's holidays simply because the prices of airline tickets are more expensive.
This
is the main reason why several
people
suggest the government should try to reduce
taxes
on
air
traffic. In conclusion,
although
trying to increase
taxes
on
air
traffic can help reduce a little
air
pollution, I personally think
this
may discourage a
lot
of
people
from visiting faraway places. Notwithstanding, it is advised to improve
air fare
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airfare
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manufactures
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manufacturers
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in order to provide us with the opportunity to breathe more fresh
air
.
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