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Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, air polution and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations. Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 present world, flying many
airplanes
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 is negatively impacting the environment through noise pollution. Nations are constructing more airports, which makes proponents suggest
taxes
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 on flight fares should be made more expensive as a means of solving the above problem. I do not agree with
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 with, holidays are an essential part of our lives;
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,
traveling
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 for long hours can negatively impact our journey.
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people
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 who have diseases involving the backbone cannot go to areas that are far from their homes.
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 can lead to the fact that a
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 of
people
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, especially older
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, prevent visiting beautiful places. It is beneficial for
people
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 to have meaningful holidays without expensive
taxes
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.
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, low-income families cannot visit their big families. To illustrate, a
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 of
people
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 who live in developing nations tend to come to developed countries to work.
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 the expensive tax on
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 traffic, these workers cannot come from their
hometown
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 in order to visit their families.
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, there are a
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 of Vietnamese working in nearby nations
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 as Japan and Korea
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 go back home during Tet's holidays simply because the prices of airline tickets are more expensive.
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 is the main reason why several
people
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 suggest the government should try to reduce
taxes
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 on
air
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 traffic. In conclusion,
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 trying to increase
taxes
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 on
air
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 traffic can help reduce a little
air
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 pollution, I personally think
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 may discourage a
lot
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 of
people
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 from visiting faraway places. Notwithstanding, it is advised to improve
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air fare
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airfare
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manufactures
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manufacturers
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 in order to provide us with the opportunity to breathe more fresh
air
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.

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task response
Ensure that your main points and examples are more closely related to the prompt. Develop your arguments with more specific and relevant examples.
coherence cohesion
Work on providing a clearer structure by organizing your ideas in a more logical way. Use transition words to connect your ideas more effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • air traffic
  • noise pollution
  • air pollution
  • airport construction
  • low-cost passenger flights
  • holiday destinations
  • taxing
  • economic impact
  • ticket prices
  • tourism
  • business travel
  • environmental benefits
  • social implications
  • budget airlines
  • government revenue
  • sustainable transportation
  • environmental conservation
  • alternative solutions
  • high-speed rail networks
  • virtual meetings
  • fuel-efficient aircraft
  • global impact
  • competitive disadvantage
  • international relations
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