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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people living alone in 5 different age groups in the USA between 1850 and 2000.

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number
 of people residing in solitude, counted in
percent
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, from 1850 to 2000.
Overall
, there was a progressive growth pattern witnessed in all data. As for the figure of people living by themselves from 55-64 years old, it relentlessly accelerated to
such
 a noticeable
number
 from three to approximately 17 and still maintained its crown in a
150-years
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 period of time. In terms of those living alone 37-46-year-olds and those who are
at
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the
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age
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from
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47 to 54 years old, despite having a relatively homogeneous initial point in the proximity of 3,
they
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had a different level of growth.
While the
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 former observed a consistently erratic variation around that
number
 after a century , followed by a vigorous hike to its peak in the vicinity of 7 in 2000. With regard to the breakdown of people living on their
owns
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 from 27 to 36 years old and those of 17-26-year-olds,
although
 there was no response detected any emergence of them until 1900 and 1950
equivalently
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respectively
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, both of them exploded to
such
a
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 astounding
number
 which is 4,5 and 6 respectively in the mentioned time epoch.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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