The bar chart below shows the percentage of people living alone in 5 different age groups in the USA between 1850 and 2000.
A glance at a bar chart provided reveals the
number
of people residing in solitude, counted in percent
, from 1850 to 2000. Change the spelling
per cent
Overall
, there was a progressive growth pattern witnessed in all data.
As for the figure of people living by themselves from 55-64 years old, it relentlessly accelerated to such
a noticeable number
from three to approximately 17 and still maintained its crown in a 150-years
period of time.
In terms of those living alone 37-46-year-olds and those who are Fix the agreement mistake
150-year
at
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
age
Replace the word
aged
from
47 to 54 years old, despite having a relatively homogeneous initial point in the proximity of 3, Change preposition
apply
they
had a different level of growth. Correct pronoun usage
apply
While the
former observed a consistently erratic variation around that Correct word choice
The
number
after a century , followed by a vigorous hike to its peak in the vicinity of 7 in 2000.
With regard to the breakdown of people living on their owns
from 27 to 36 years old and those of 17-26-year-olds, Replace the word
own
although
there was no response detected any emergence of them until 1900 and 1950 equivalently
, both of them exploded to Rephrase
respectively
such
a
astounding Change the article
an
number
which is 4,5 and 6 respectively in the mentioned time epoch.Submitted by hominhtrang995 on
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