Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fuit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Up to now fruit and vegetable become more and more important thing in our life so,
the
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plane is being used to transport vegetables and fruit to
others
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countries which hardly plant or
out
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are out
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of season. Some people think it is
a
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idealistic plant
while
some individuals do not agree with it.
This
writer
agree
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with the formal choice and I will highlight the reasons why in the following essay. On the one
hand
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using
aircraft
is a good idea
to
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transport because
plane
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planes
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can do it
more and more faster
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faster and faster
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than people
in
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the same time.
In
addition
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the quality of food or vegetable which is transported by plane is high so it can
easy
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protect the health of people who
use
it
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.
On the other
hand
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there are some problems if we want to
use
aircraft
.
Firstly
about
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the cost that we need to spend on maintenance or to fix one or more
aircraft
one
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year is really high.
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we need to worry about the energy that
aircraft
need to
use
while
it
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judgment and it
also
have
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a lot of problems if the
aircraft
run
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out of oil.
From
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my opinion
aircraft
is an idealistic chance in now day.
In
addition
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if we have enough money to operate it smoothly our life will become more flexible and comfortable
Thus
, choosing to increase the
use
of planes is the best way to supply green foods to other poor countries and problems with planting land. So we can conclude that
aircraft
are the best transportation to do transit work from all over the world.
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