The older people who need employment have to compete with younger ones. What problems can this create? What are some solutions.

It is true that competition is a significant attitude in a workplace which is popular
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between
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young and old employees. There are numerous reasons regarding
this
issue, and various measures can be taken by governments to improve
this
situation.
To begin
, despite
highly
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experience, old people seem to be less productive
due to
their ages. Their health could
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negative
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effect on their
job
performance.
Additionally
, the rate of
unemployees
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is increasing.
Due to
the
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joblessness, the
youngers
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younger
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oftens
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often
lack
of
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money and they commit
crime
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. Not only that, the teenagers who
dedicated
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to working but non-experience are
also
affected. A good example is that people who have just graduated could not find a
job
because they lack
of
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experience.
However
, the older would be redundant because of their health. To
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this
problem, I think that companies should soon implement early retirement incentive programs for devoted elderly labourers. Some social benefits should be given to ensure
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that
they will live healthily and rest.
Besides
, more
job
oppoturnities
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opportunities
should be created for young people. The best example of
this
is that there is a system for training and
job
promotion of talented and devoted young
staffs
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. In
this
way
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they can develop their potential to make
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to the company
thay
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they
work for.
To sum up
, young and older workers play
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role in the companies's growth. That
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it is crucial for the managers to lead a workforce through training activities
as well as
labourers
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incentive scheme.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ageism
  • Generational divide
  • Technological advancements
  • Skills gap
  • Job scarcity
  • Industry preferences
  • Pension expenditure
  • Financial planning
  • Employability
  • Retraining programs
  • Upskilling opportunities
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