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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetable to some coutries where such plants hardly grow or are out of to some season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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With the advancing of ways to travel in the sky, there is an idea about using
airplane
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 to
transport
 fruit and vegetables from the place. They are hard to grow or out of season, some people approve
it
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of it
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 or show objection
for
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to
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 it.
This
 essay will compare both of the views and give the reason why it is an innovation.
Firstly
, the
available
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availability
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 of different cultural products. It will depend on
season
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the season
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 was a frustrating thing.
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, in the past, when you
want
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wanted
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 to eat leeches in
Britian
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Britain
, you
have
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had
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 to travel for months and if you
lucky
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were lucky
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, you
will
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would
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 arrive
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in
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on
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in
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 May in some leech-growing country or you
can
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 be unfortunate when you
arrive
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arrived
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, it
out
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is out
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 of season. So, it
really
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is really
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 hard to eat fruits or
vegertables
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vegetables
 when
it
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they
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 can not grow in your local area or the harvesting
not
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has not
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 come yet. But, with aircraft, the
inport
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import
 and export of these products will be far easier and can be accessible everywhere. Though we do have a way to
transport
good
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a good
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 place to place, like train or ship. It
need
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 to be
consider
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considered
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 that the way is cheaper.
However
, the risk of damaging the products and
delay
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delaying
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 the
transport
it
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is
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 way higher than using airmail.
Moreover
, when we
transport
 by plane, it is very difficult like only a little
of
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apply
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person,
easy
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easily
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 damaged on shipping lines. If I were you, I would choose to
transport
 by ship or train.
With
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For
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 many
reason
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reasons
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 is more convenient than
plane
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a plane
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.
Although
 aircraft is
importion
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important
, I think it will
safer
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be safer
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 if everyone
use
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uses
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 land
transport
 road.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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