The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 compared  with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the table and line graph representing the trends in the value of a country's exports between 2015 and 2016 ,
while
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percentage differences in 2016 compared with 2015. As can be seen from the graph, there are five categories
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products
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of products
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export
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in 2015 and 2016. The majority of petroleum
products
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exported
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were exported
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in 2015 and 2016 at approximately 60
billions
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billion
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,
second
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highest amount of earnings
got
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from engineered goods
in
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between 2015 and 2016.
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, the minority of earning
product
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products
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is
textile
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textiles
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in 2015 at almost 25
billions
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billion
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.
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, in 2016, textiles and agricultural
products
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are
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were
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export
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exported
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at in
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in
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an
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equal level at nearly 30
billions
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billion
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. On the
othe
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other
hand, in 2016, petroleum and engineered
products
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are
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were
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exported
than
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in 2015 at 3% and 8.5% respectively.
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, gems and
jewelry
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changes
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in
values
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value
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at
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by
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5.18% from 2015 to 2016. These
products
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only
have
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had
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highly
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export
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exports
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in 2015 than
2016
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in 2016
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.
Whereas
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, agricultural
products
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show little amount of changes in values at 0.81%,
however
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, textiles show dramatical changes in values at 15.24%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words products with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • significant
  • figures
  • percentage
  • notable
  • trend
  • overall
  • specific
  • observed
  • presented
  • individually
  • highlight
  • general
  • data
  • summarize
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