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In some countries, governments encourage businesses to move outside of the cities to solve the problems of housing and transport in the cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this policy?

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One of the main strategies implemented by the governments to solve the housing and transportation problems in the
city
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 is the policy that advises businesses to
move
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 to suburban
areas
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 method has some advantages
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 drawbacks. First of all, many distant
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, where the prices for rent may be lower than in the cities, are not ,
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, popular among the community to
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 for a reason that they are not
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 the fact that they do not have enough services to offer. To reduce
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 negative developments, it is crucial to encourage businesses to open their offices or stores in
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 to attract the population, and,
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, solve the housing problem, since people are finding those
areas
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 more attractive
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 to the existing low rent prices. When comes to transport, when more people are going to
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 to a new neighbourhood, local authorities will have a reason to develop and expand the local transportation networks to connect the area with the
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 centre. Despite all the positive effects the policy may cause, it has some significant drawbacks, that should be taken into consideration.
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, moving businesses far away from the
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 centre
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 may directly affect their income, since the amount of customers will automatically drop, since big and busy
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 in the
city
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 create more potential to expand the customer base.
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, some of the loyal customers may not be willing to continue using the services anymore if they
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 far away from the previous area. The transit costs may dramatically increase since the travelling distance to distant neighbourhoods will increase.
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 may create isolation of the
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, suburban
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 can be seen as dangerous places to live, which does cause negative associations
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 affecting folk's willingness to
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, that kind of business policy may have some positive effects
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 as attracting the nation to
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 to suburban
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,
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, it
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 has some drawbacks. These include the reduction of customers, which affects the profits
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 creates higher prices for transportation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban congestion
  • Economic spillover
  • Population density
  • Infrastructure development
  • Rural areas
  • Quality of life
  • Commuting challenges
  • Job dissatisfaction
  • Significant investment
  • Uneven development
  • Business-centric
  • Housing crisis
  • Transport issues
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