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Importance of Physical Education in School Explain your answer giving reasons and specific examples.

#importance #education #school
Nowadays, all
school
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schools
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an
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importance
for
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to
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the
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Physical Education.
Overall
,
following
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 essay shall explain the reasons and examples.
Firstly
, I
beleive
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believe
 that the extra curriculum activities
is
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are
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 one of the important in the
school
organiztion
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organization
 because Physical
Edcution
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Education
 is one of
the
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subject
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subjects
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addded
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added
in
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 the curriculum
as well as
 it can distract
to
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the
students
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who awlays
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awlays
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always
 uses their
mobils
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mobile
mobiles
 phones.
In addition
, their a lot of
benifits
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benefits
to
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 the
students
specially
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to
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thier
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their
 hobbies in sports
as well as
in
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singing, dancing
and
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etc.
Furthermore
, help to exercise
thier
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their
 mind and body from the pressure of
thier
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their
the
 other subjects.
Additionally
, boost
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the confident
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confident
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confidence
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to
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of
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 the student if
their
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there
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 will perform
in
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on
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 stage and
other
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in other
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theater
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theatre
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.
Moreover
, it
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is benificial
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benificial
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beneficial
to
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 the
students
 to explore their talents so that
their
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they
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 can share
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them to
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to
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with
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 their families or in
event
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events
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.
Secondly
,
the
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Physical Education can help
to
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the
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parents
that
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who
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 can not afford to send their children to
school
.
Furtheremore
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, it
beneficial
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is beneficial
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 to the
student
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students
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the
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 extra curriculum activities for the reason that can give them
scholarship
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scholarships
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.
For example
, the
students
 in the province
cant
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can't
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 afford to continue
the
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school
 in
the
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college but the
students
is
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are
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 very good in one
sports
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sport
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 like basketball. In conclusion, extra activities
is
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are
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 not good
to
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for
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the
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students
 with problem in
health
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their health
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conditon
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condition
conditions
.
In
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other
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the other
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 hand, it helps
to
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the
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student
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students
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 who are not born rich but
a
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have a
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lot of talents.
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