Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people opposie it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Using
aeroplane
Correct article usage
an aeroplane
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is the best way to transport
fruits
and
vegetables
to many nations that can not standard of the season
while
some
people
argue that it is a bad method because of causing negative effects. Some
people
believe that
plane
Correct article usage
a plane
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is a means of transporting
food
that can save a lot of time. Many
countries
can not grow tropical
fruits
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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are good conditions for tropical
countries
to expand relationships with nations and develop national financial resources.
In addition
, it is easy for
people
in different
countries
to try and enjoy many types of
fruits
and
vegetables
such
as dragon fruit and spinach. European
countries
are an example, the crops in their
countries
are not appropriate for the environment and lands.
As a result
, delivery by aeroplane
have
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has
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been
popular
Change the adjective
popularly
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used to
transportation
Replace the word
transport
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crops to
countries
where are lacking
of
Remove the preposition
apply
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plants.
On the other hand
, exporting
food
by aeroplane still has many problems and is not supported by others
This
means that shipping abroad is more expensive than growing in their
countries
.
This
is because
,
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apply
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it can not be grown, there is no other way than importing. 
For instance
, the seller will use
preservative
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preservatives
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to maintain the quality that
affecting
Wrong verb form
affects
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their health
such
as cancer and lifespan.
Moreover
, the airline is the cause of environmental pollution. Starting an
airplane
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aeroplane
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can consume a lot of fossil fuels
such
as coal and oil, which greatly affects the environment
as well as
human health.
Therefore
,
fruits
and
vegetables
are protested by
people
when it is imported. The writer believes that
fruits
and
vegetables
will be exported by aircraft. Because of
this
,
people
in tropical
countries
want other nations to enjoy the kind of
food
that makes more relationships. In conclusion, the airline makes good transportation for
food
whereas
some
people
do not want imported
fruits
and
vegetables
.
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