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Aircraft have been increaseingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Come people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There
is
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significant
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a significant
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 rise recently in
airplane
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aeroplane
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use
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 for the delivery service of transporting fruits and vegetables. Many individuals believe that importing
products
 by aircraft is
good
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 choice
whereas
 some people disagree with that argument.
This
 essay will agree with the former view and
also
 think
about
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that
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 using
plane
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planes
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 to import fruits and vegetables is beneficial in two important methods.
Firstly
, the government can effectively implement
specification
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 strategy for different areas with specific features.
While
 industrial zones in which farming is not suitable, rural areas provide agricultural
products
 based on their geographic advantages. Just only
by
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this
 way that we can totally make the most of the available resources to maximize profits with minimum costs.
Secondly
, thanks to advances in technology,
the
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airplay has been a popular means of transport in
a
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 long term for its high speed.
Moreover
, agricultural
products
 can be transported easily from
this
 place to
another places
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another place
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 within hours. The most special thing is with the best storage and helpful
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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,
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 can maintain fruits and
vegetables
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vegetable
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 freshness over a long haul flight. There is no doubt that
air
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the air
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 pollution rate has been
increaseing
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increasing
 dramatically in step with the widespread use of planes for exporting commodities
into
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to
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 nationals. In fact, exhaust from
airplane
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airplanes
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 contains a variation of air pollutants
such
 as sulfur dioxide and nitrogen oxides
have
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released into
air
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the air
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.
This
 will lead to respiratory diseases
such
 as lung cancer, cough,....
ect
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etc
. In conclusion, I want to say that agricultural
products
are being exporting
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 to many countries by
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 have both advantages and disadvantages.
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