The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.

The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.
The line graph displays details on the number of
people
travelling
with
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by
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car, bus,
train
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and train
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in Britain daily between 1970 and 2030.The units
is
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are
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measured in millions.
Overall
,it is evident from the chart that, there was an upward trend in the use of all transportation mediums, with the use of
bus
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buses
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being an exception.
To begin
with, In 1970,the number of
people
who travelled
in
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car was the highest amongst other transport systems at 5
million
,
however
, that of the
train
was the least at 2
million
. From 1970,the figure increased steadily across
board
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.
Furthermore
,the
people
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number of people
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who
transported
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are transported
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via car skyrocketed over the years to 9
million
by 2030 hitting the high of the chart.
Although
, the figures of
people
who commuted via
train
plunged to almost 3
million
by 2030 being the least
while
those who made use of
bus
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a bus
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to commute made an intersection with the figure of
train
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trains
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at 4
millions
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million
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between 2010 and 2020, and eventually rose to 5
millions
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million
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and was the second highest by 2030.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, train, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • mode of transport
  • fluctuating trend
  • downward trend
  • public transport policies
  • preferences
  • railway infrastructure
  • economic factors
  • environmental factors
  • technological factors
  • sustainable commuting
  • noticeable increase
  • investments
  • dominance
  • propensity
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