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In the past, lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students in a classroom. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?

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 progressively developing from day to day .There are significant differences between the past teaching
method
 and the present.
This
 essay will discuss the positive and negative aspects of
this
 ongoing trend. There are two main benefits that impact of new technologies on
students
.First of all,modern
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 apps for each one around the world.Another positive aspect is modern
method
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students
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People
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people
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 chance to go to study or too far getting
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 education great occasion for them. In a few words modern system is convenience, saving time and of course,acceptable education.
This
 ongoing trend
further
 has some disadvantages.
Firstly
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 an added concern
for example
,not every school district has resources to provide
students
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people
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 too much time
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sitting in front of
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 every day.It can be
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demanding
damaging
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people
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Moreover
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 apart.To give an instance the majority of
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 a lot of time on screen wear glasses.
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Furthermore
 some country has laggard internet.
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 it is impossible for
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method
 of
teaching.No
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teaching
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advantages has , the main thing is
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 health. In
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 both
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online and offline methods are essential for
people
 .The main thing is
students
 must make sure how they use their opportunity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Multimedia content
  • Automated grading
  • Global collaboration
  • Critical thinking
  • Personalized learning
  • Digital divide
  • Interactive software
  • E-learning platforms
  • Virtual classrooms
  • Technological literacy
  • Distance education
  • Digital resources
  • Cybersecurity concerns
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Pedagogical approaches
  • Disruption in education
  • Innovative teaching methods
  • Accessibility features
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