In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule? Use specific reasons and details to support your position.

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Smoking generally is not the best behaviour.
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some
people
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can not handle their life without smoking. Some
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smokes
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smoke
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for joy and
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relaxation
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. Nicotine can really bring some
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, which is even approved by a lot of tests made by scientists.
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, the effect is temporary and I think it
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isn't
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t
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worth it. Smoking tradition,
as well as
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the terminology, generally
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appeared
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a lot of time ago, but it is still taking place in our
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lives
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. As for me, I am not
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convinced
while
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people
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are smoking in front of me or nearby. There are a lot of places in our country marked as a spot for smoking, which
people
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can easily use, and they will not interfere
anyone's
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with anyone's
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rest or time
spending
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. Especially if we are talking about the
caffes
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cafes
or other restrooms. There are
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special places or even different halls or rooms for smoking
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, so they will not affect non-smoking
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. On the other side of the medal, we have
the
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smokers
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, who sometimes don'
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even have a place allowed for
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, especially in some little villages or cities.
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, in my town, there are no smoking spots at all, only some
caffes
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cafes
have sits for
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, and there are not too many of them. There are no smoking spots around my town at all, no
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sign or table that says that you can or can not
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here.
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a problem of smaller towns, and it should be solved. Even if you don'
t
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like that
people
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smokes
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smoke
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in front of you, you can not prove that he or she is wrong,
as well as
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the smoker can not prove that it is legal and allowed. That's a little bit hard for non-smoking
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to move forward or close to the smoking
people
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. The smell is truly
awfull
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awful
and
smokers
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can'
t
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even smell it. I know what I'm talking about, because I
smoke
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as well, and thankfully I finished with that health-braking
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. I would
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like to discuss
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another kind
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of
people
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that
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who
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are not smoking, but
also
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doing everything to make everyone stop smoking. At least they think so. They are going into the hookah bar and saying that it is too "cloudy" here, asking to
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quiter
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quite
quieter
,
in other words
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, doing everything to stop
people
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around
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from smoking
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smoke
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. I don'
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really appreciate or approve
that
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kind of view, but those
people
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think that if they do not
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- no one
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t
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smoke
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.
That is
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disrespectful, and I'm always saying that. To summarize, I would like to
tell
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that smoking is not the best thing
people
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can do, but we should treat and respect
people
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who would like to
smoke
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. They have the same rights, and smoking doesn'
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violates
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the law
,
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if it is done in
proper
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a proper
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way and in
proper
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place. Of course, we are not talking about the forbidden stuff. I think that everyone should decide if he would like to
smoke
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or not, but the rights of
smokers
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should
be treat
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in the same way as all the other population who
doesn'
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don't
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t
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smoke
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.
For
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conclusion, I would like to say
: If
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that if
you are going to
smoke
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, think twice, and make sure that
a
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the
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temporary joy you'll get is worth a few days or even hours of your life, because, as everyone knows, smoking kills!

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