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Nowadays, with the advancement of technology, people can work and live anywhere they want. Do its advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Online technologies are opening numerous possibilities for
employees
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 to
work
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 outside the office
in
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 the current time. Workers are able to have
more
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 flexible timetable.
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, for the
others
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 it’s caused a problem with structuring to-do lists and changing the constant model of working. In my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. The most significant advantages
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 the phenomenon are freedom and mobility. In
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 case,
employees
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 are able to
work
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 all around the world and personalise plans by themselves.
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, they can find themselves in a travelling way: visit countries, learn about cultural aspects and traditions,
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new friends among the native population.
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, it can be a solution for foreign
employees
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work
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 abroad. They are able to
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 in their motherlands and spend some part of their time on communication with
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 families and old friends.
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,
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 colleagues feel loneliness.
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 aspect can lead to mental disorders.
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, if they
work
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 in a convenient and habitual atmosphere, they will solve the problems and make their emotions more stable, which is influenced
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 a significant part of the
work
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. The majority disadvantage of
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 idea is a science of uncertainty,
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this
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 is expended by
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 of
employees
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. Some of them prefer to obtain
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 constant working place and well-planned timetable. It plays a huge role
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 the quality of
work
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.
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, if the staff who prefer to
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 by constantly
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 with rules are going to try
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 new way of working, the workers will feel difficulties with adaptation
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new
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a new
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 place and
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 of freedom. The quality of their
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 and sense of
convenient
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 will show a downward trend. In conclusion, it can be seen that
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 has numerous
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advantages, which are directed to freedom, mobility and worker’s feelings.
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, some
employees
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 prefer to
work
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 in a familiar business model. I think that the best solution is to save two types of
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 and make the ability for
employees
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 to choose the most convenient way for them.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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