The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the expenditure of foreign visitors in the UK between 1980 and 2010,
while
the pie chart provides information about the purpose of visiting during the given period.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the general trend of spending
money
increased over time with the fluctuation in numbers of
money
. The main reason for visiting was a holiday,
however
, the percentages of visiting friends or relatives and business rose during the period. Regarding the
money
spent in the UK, the total amount of
money
rose. At the beginning of the given period, there was a sharp decline, reaching its lowest point in approximately 1982 with around 7100 million pounds. After that there was a dramatic increase and fluctuation, reaching a peak in around 1996 with 12000 million pounds, which was the highest point in the graph. After that, the fluctuation in numbers was shown with a decrease by 2010 with over 10500 million pounds. Regarding the pie chart, the holiday was the most popular reason for visiting in 1980 and 2010, with almost 44% and 39%, respectively. Visiting friends or relatives increased by almost 10%, from under 19% to over 28%,
while
visiting for business rose by around 2%, from almost 21% to approximately 23%.
And other
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reasons became less common in 2010, compared to 1980, with 16,6% and 9,8%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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