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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
The line graph provides information about discharging the average
amount
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 of greenhouse gases per person in the four countries, the
UK
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, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the average
carbon
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dioxide
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 emissions in Italy and Portugal experienced an increase
while
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 releasing
carbon
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dioxide
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 in the
UK
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 and Sweden decreased notably over the 40 years, albeit, the
UK
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 represented the highest
amount
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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emission
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. The
amount
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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emission
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 in Italy surged from 4 metric
tonnes
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 to over 6 metric
tonnes
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 in the first
decade
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,
then
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 experienced a stable increase and in the
last
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decade
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, reached a plateau and stood under 8 metric
tonnes
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although
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 Portugal in the first 30 years, saw a sharp increase in
carbon
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dioxide
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emission
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,
similarly
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, in the
last
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decade
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 with just under 6 metric
tonnes
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 reached a plateau.
While
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 the
UK
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 discharged more than 10
tonnes
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 metric 1967, the
amount
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 of greenhouse gas declined significantly and in 2007 stood at above 8 metric
tonnes
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. Sweden in the first
decade
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 witnessed a surge, amounting to approximately 10 metric
tonnes
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;
however
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, the average
carbon
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dioxide
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emission
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 from 1997 to 2007 decreased dramatically and stood under 6 metric
tonnes
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, uk, carbon, dioxide, emission, tonnes, decade with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surged" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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