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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
It is often argued that various
problems
 in daily life could arise when you have to live in a foreign
language speaking
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country
.
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, I agree that
the
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various
problems
 could appear when living in a foreign
language speaking
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country
. I think it is not a big problem
due to
 the technological improvements. On the one hand, it is difficult to instantly provide an answer to a question
due to
language
 barriers. Some queries may need instant feedback. But some
problems
 could appear
due to
 long waiting
time
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times
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 from the answering party caused by
communication
problems
.
For example
, police officers in Germany do not speak English.
Therefore
, the person needs a help from translator to continue the
communication
.
Otherwise
,
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 points will be deducted from the driving license.
Therefore
,
communication related
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 issues could appear when living in a foreign
language speaking
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language-speaking
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country
.
On the other hand
, most smart devices offer
real time
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language
 translations without an active internet connection.
Therefore
, dealing with
the
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people from foreign
country
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countries
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 is not a big deal
due to
 current technological enhancements.
For instance
, Google live translation was tested in India by selecting citizens from different age groups. Each individual
was participated
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to
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 a real-life conversation with a person who does not speak
native
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the native
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language
 of India. All the participants could perform their conversation with the help
from
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 the translating device.
Thus
,
communication
problems
 could
mitigate
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 through the innovation of technological devices.
To conclude
, I believe that
the
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some practical
problems
 could appear when
live
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 in a foreign
language speaking
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country
. I think that it could be mitigated through the development of technological devices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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