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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The maps illustrate a plan for converting
Norbiton
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the Norbiton
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 industrial
area
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 to be converted into a housing
area
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.
Overall
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, they are planning to renovate the
area
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 as a residential
area
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 with basic facilities
such
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 as Shops, a School, a Medical centre, and a Playground. The first map shows
a
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an
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 industrial
area
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 which is located near a town and there are many factories.
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, they planned to create a roundabout on the main road to access the place easily. When we enter the place they will build a medical Centre on the right side and Shops on the left. They planned to build a school at the east end of the road and create a playground near the school. some housing Buildings are
also
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 there.
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, they planned to lengthen the road to create a bridge over the river, which is located on the north side and build a housing block on the Farmland. on the west-north side, three more residential blocks will be created.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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