Government spending on restoration of old buildings in cities should be stopped. Instead they should spend the money for housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?

#government #restoration #buildings #cities #money #road #development

Nowadays, Some people believe the ministry should focus on today's issues like housing

while

others are opposed to it.

However

, I disagree with the given statement

due to

several possible reasons

such

as cultural heritage and

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economy and the following paragraphs will expatiate both stances with lucid examples.

To begin

with, the prominent reason to disagree is to protect the buildings, especially historical ones. To explain

further

, these buildings are not only beneficial for cultures but

also

for the representation of the country. The Red Fort,

for example

, has its own significance in representing India to other states.

Moreover

, it is crucial for teaching and inclined the economic status of the nation as an illustration, museums, and galleries. Maharaja Ranjit Singh Mahal, to illustrate, plays an important role in teaching history

as well as

being famous as a tourist destination.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

142 words

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

historic
heritage
preservation
conservation
restoration
urban development
housing
road infrastructure
tourism
revenue
community
identity
property values
craftsmanship
architectural styles
job creation
economic growth
compromise

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Government spending on restoration of old buildings in cities should be stopped. Instead they should spend the money for housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

people think that the government should ban dangerous sports.Others say that the society should be allowed to freely participate in any

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