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Online shopping has gained immense popularity in recent years, challenging the traditional brick-and-mortar stores. Examine the advantages and disadvantages of both methods of shopping and give your opinion

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There is no denying the fact that online shopping invaded the world recently.
While
 it is a commonly held belief that shopping online is more common and popular. There is
also
 an argument that a lot of people prefer onsite shopping.
This
 essay will analyse
this
 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, shopping online makes people’s lives much easier and it saves time.
In other words
, you can
order
 whatever you need now and you will
recive
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receive
 it at your location in hours, days or weeks.
In addition
, some brands started to provide
thier
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their
costumers
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customers
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a
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with a
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phone application to help them to
order
 from home.
For example
, what happened during
Covid
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COVID
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 quarantine no one was allowed to exit
home
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the home
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, so, everyone had to
order
 what he wanted by using online applications.
On the other hand
, onsite shopping gives you the opportunity to touch and try what you are looking for. It is
also
 possible to say that it helps you to know the material and quality of the
order
.
Moreover
, you can try it and see if it is suitable for you or not. For
insetance
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instance
, in
Zara
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the Zara
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 shop, they usually provide a measurement room inside the place to let the client confirm the size before he pays. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
 question.
However
, I tend to believe that people can choose online or onsite shopping
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 on their free time and how much they trust the material.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Brick-and-mortar
  • Tactile
  • Fraud
  • Geographical limitations
  • Price comparisons
  • Instant gratification
  • Personalized service
  • Social experience
  • Hybrid models
  • Click and collect
  • Impulse buying
  • Physical examination
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
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