Government spending on restoration of old buildings in cities should be stopped. Instead they should spend the money for housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?

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recent
debate
whether
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the govetnment
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govetnment
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government
governments
should spend the funds on
further
developement
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development
developments
in
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roads and houses
instead
of
restoration
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the restoration
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of old monuments.
Although
I think it has both pros and cons and
this
eassay
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essay
explores my views with relevant
eptitoms
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epitome
and
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conclusions . To Commence with, Old historical building
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very inevitable for
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society because it reflects the past architectural technology which is almost
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in
this
modern era and It might be beneficial for upcoming generations they can learn about the cultural and traditional values of historical values.
Moreover
, it can
also
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for tourism which
help
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the nation to contribute
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their economic growth .Taj Mahal is would be the one
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of
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and
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anuall
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annual
revenue about 10 million dollars which is outstanding for Indian Government.
On the other hand
, In
this
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era development is
also
playing a vital role in terms of living
standard
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. Owing to
this
,
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ourskirts
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outskirts
our skirts
of the
citites
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cities
are facing the hard times of their life
beacause
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because
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they
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do not have
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access to modern
facilites
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facilities
such
as fully constructed
house
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houses
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and new roads which help them to
travell
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travel
with ease .
Further More
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, spending money on
further
growth will create more job
oppourtunities
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opportunities
which assist
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people financially.
For instance
, Bangladesh has
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Higher GDP as compared to other nations because of drastic growth in their development
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the recent World Nation Survey in 2023.
To Conclude
,
developement
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development
is
indispensable
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an indispensable
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assests
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asset
for society in order to bring quality and
higher
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a higher
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standard of life.
However
, restoration is
also
crucial for preserving the
traditonal
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traditional
values of our ancestors.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • historic
  • heritage
  • preservation
  • conservation
  • restoration
  • urban development
  • housing
  • road infrastructure
  • tourism
  • revenue
  • community
  • identity
  • property values
  • craftsmanship
  • architectural styles
  • job creation
  • economic growth
  • compromise
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