Government spending on restoration of old buildings in cities should be stopped. Instead they should spend the money for housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?
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reccent
debate Correct your spelling
recent
whether
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about whether
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the govetnment
govetnment
should spend the funds on Correct your spelling
government
governments
further
developement
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development
developments
in
roads and houses Change preposition
of
instead
of restoration
of old monuments. Correct article usage
the restoration
Although
I think it has both pros and cons and this
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explores my views with relevant Correct your spelling
essay
eptitoms
and Correct your spelling
epitome
well defined
conclusions .
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well-defined
are
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is
the
society because it reflects the past architectural technology which is almost Correct article usage
apply
vanishes
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vanished
this
modern era and It might be beneficial for upcoming generations they can learn about the cultural and traditional values of historical values.
Moreover
, it can also
act as source
for tourism which Add an article
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help
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it's
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its
anuall
revenue about 10 million dollars which is outstanding for Indian Government.
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annual
On the other hand
, In this
fast paced
era development is Add a hyphen
fast-paced
also
playing a vital role in terms of living standard
. Owing to Fix the agreement mistake
standards
this
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the ourskirts
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outskirts
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citites
are facing the hard times of their life Correct your spelling
cities
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because
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they
the
access to modern Correct article usage
apply
facilites
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facilities
such
as fully constructed house
and new roads which help them to Fix the agreement mistake
houses
travell
with ease . Correct your spelling
travel
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, spending money on Correct your spelling
Furthermore
further
growth will create more job oppourtunities
which assist Correct your spelling
opportunities
the
people financially.Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, Bangladesh has the
Higher GDP as compared to other nations because of drastic growth in their development Correct article usage
a
according
the recent World Nation Survey in 2023.
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according to
To Conclude
, developement
is Correct your spelling
development
indispensable
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an indispensable
assests
for society in order to bring quality and Correct your spelling
asset
higher
standard of life. Correct article usage
a higher
However
, restoration is also
crucial for preserving the traditonal
values of our ancestors.Correct your spelling
traditional
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