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Band 2.5

These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Do advantages of working at home outweigh diadvantages?

#people #computer #telephone #job #home #diadvantages
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modern
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ear
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era
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, technology rises day by day. Nowadays people totally depend on digital
system
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systems
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 for their
work
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. As compare to
past
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 now people use
electonics
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electronics
 robots for their jobs because they are more
convienent
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convenient
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compare
compared
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do
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work
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office
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. so there are distinct
benfits
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benefits
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of
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above
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 statement. To commence with, using laptops and computers at
home
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 for occupation is more beneficial as it saves
time
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 to go
for
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to
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office
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, To do
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office
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an office
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 job they have to travel which
consume
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consumes
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 lots of
time
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whereas
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 doing
work
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home
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at home
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 they do not need to go outside.
Furthermore
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, spend
time
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 with family, From
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work
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working
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home
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 a person can make more strong with family
memeber
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members
member
 as they enjoy each and every activity with their family member rather than getting
collpassr
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collapsar
 with other employees.
Best
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this
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 is a person can eat on
time
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spend
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and spend
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 some quality
time
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 on
break
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the break
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 with their loved ones.
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,
first
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the first
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 and foremost drawback is
work
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 environment is like
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office
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an office
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home
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A lots
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 of
home
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distirbance
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disturbance
distract
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distracts
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 the person from his
work
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. They did not get
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office
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an office
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 environment so they
donot
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do not
 concentrate or focus at
work
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. In conclusion ,
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benefits
benfits
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benefits
 are more rather than
drwbacks
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drawbacks
 so
I
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in
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 my point of view
job
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a job
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 from
home
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 is more beneficial than
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office
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an office
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