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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Do advantages of working at home outweigh diadvantages?

#people #computer #telephone #job #home #diadvantages
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modern
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the modern
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ear
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era
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, technology rises day by day. Nowadays people totally depend on digital
system
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systems
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 for their
work
. As compare to
past
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the past
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 now people use
electonics
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electronics
 robots for their jobs because they are more
convienent
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convenient
 as
comapre
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compare
compared
 to
do
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work
 at
office
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. so there are distinct
benfits
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benefits
 and drawbacks
of
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above
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the above
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 statement. To commence with, using laptops and computers at
home
 for occupation is more beneficial as it saves
time
 to go
for
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office
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the office
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 .
For instance
, To do
office
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an office
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 job they have to travel which
consume
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consumes
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 lots of
time
whereas
 doing
work
home
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at home
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 they do not need to go outside.
Furthermore
, spend
time
 with family, From
work
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working
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 from
home
 a person can make more strong with family
memeber
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members
member
 as they enjoy each and every activity with their family member rather than getting
collpassr
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collapsar
 with other employees.
Best
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 example of
this
 is a person can eat on
time
spend
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and spend
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 some quality
time
 on
break
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the break
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 with their loved ones.
On the other hand
,
first
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the first
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 and foremost drawback is
work
 environment is like
office
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an office
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 at
home
 .
A lots
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A lot
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 of
home
distirbance
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disturbance
distract
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distracts
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 the person from his
work
. They did not get
office
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an office
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 environment so they
donot
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do not
 concentrate or focus at
work
. In conclusion ,
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benefits
benfits
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benefits
 are more rather than
drwbacks
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drawbacks
 so
I
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in
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 my point of view
job
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a job
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 from
home
 is more beneficial than
office
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an office
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