The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table gives information about the
fluctuacy
Correct your spelling
fluctuating
number
of
people
went
Correct pronoun usage
who went
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overseas
travel
Verb problem
apply
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from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
, it is evident that there is significant changes total of
people
going abroad for travel from 1990 to 2005, with the highest
number
of citizen who travel internationally
is
Wrong verb form
being
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European,
while
the
least
Correct word choice
lowest
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number
is come
Change to the active voice
comes
has come
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from
Middle
Correct article usage
the Middle
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East.
To begin
with, in 1990, European
people
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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in the
number
one ranking among other countries
whose
Correct pronoun usage
who
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went abroad, with about 280,2
million
people
,
this
number
had
such
a large gap compared to other countries
such
as Africa, Asia, America, and
Middle
Correct article usage
the Middle
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East, with average only 9,8 - 80,5
million
people
. After 15 years, Europe still
remain
Change the verb form
remains
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the country
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
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love
Correct subject-verb agreement
loves
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travelling abroad, as the
number
of population travelling every year always
increase
Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
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until 2005, touching 400,2
million
people
.
On the other hand
,
Middle
Correct article usage
the Middle
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East can be said as the least country with the
citizen
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
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went
Correct pronoun usage
who went
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overseas
Rephrase
abroad
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,
this
can be
look
Wrong verb form
looked
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at
1990
Change preposition
from 1990
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to 2005, the average of
people
went
Correct pronoun usage
who went
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abroad was only below 20
million
, with
average
Correct article usage
an average
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9,8
Change preposition
of 9,8
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- 15,8
million
people
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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