The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table gives information about the
fluctuacy
Correct your spelling
fluctuating
number
of people
went
overseas Correct pronoun usage
who went
travel
from 1990 to 2005.
Verb problem
apply
Overall
, it is evident that there is significant changes total of people
going abroad for travel from 1990 to 2005, with the highest number
of citizen who travel internationally is
European, Wrong verb form
being
while
the least
Correct word choice
lowest
number
is come
from Change to the active voice
comes
has come
Middle
East.
Correct article usage
the Middle
To begin
with, in 1990, European people
was
in the Correct subject-verb agreement
were
number
one ranking among other countries whose
went abroad, with about 280,2 Correct pronoun usage
who
million
people
, this
number
had such
a large gap compared to other countries such
as Africa, Asia, America, and Middle
East, with average only 9,8 - 80,5 Correct article usage
the Middle
million
people
. After 15 years, Europe still remain
the country Change the verb form
remains
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
love
travelling abroad, as the Correct subject-verb agreement
loves
number
of population travelling every year always increase
until 2005, touching 400,2 Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
million
people
.
On the other hand
, Middle
East can be said as the least country with the Correct article usage
the Middle
citizen
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
went
Correct pronoun usage
who went
overseas
, Rephrase
abroad
this
can be look
at Wrong verb form
looked
1990
to 2005, the average of Change preposition
from 1990
people
went
abroad was only below 20 Correct pronoun usage
who went
million
, with average
Correct article usage
an average
9,8
- 15,8 Change preposition
of 9,8
million
people
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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