Today food travels from thousand of miles from the farm to consumer. Some people say it would be better for economy and environment if people ate food produced from local farmers. Would advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?
In
this
cutting edge
era, it is common Add a hyphen
cutting-edge
that
farmers Correct word choice
for
produce
Fix the infinitive
to produce
food
in
their farms but consumers purchase it in different countries which is too far fromChange preposition
on
the
Correct article usage
apply
food
production. Some people
gave their view that if people
consume food
produced from
local farmers Change preposition
by
then
it is beneficial for both economy
and Correct article usage
the economy
environment
. In my Correct article usage
the environment
perception
the given statement has Add a comma
perception,
such
benifits
which surpass the demerits.
In regards to the pros, locally grown Correct your spelling
benefits
food
has many benefits to the environment
and economy. Firstly
, it can reduce an
adverse Correct article usage
apply
effect
on Fix the agreement mistake
effects
environment
. Add an article
the environment
This
is because imported food
transported
through various ways of transportation like by Add a missing verb
is transported
the
means of ships, trains, Correct article usage
apply
aeroplane
etc. Which produce toxic fumes that cause pollution. If Fix the agreement mistake
aeroplanes
one
purchase
Correct subject-verb agreement
purchases
food
which is grown by local farmers have
Wrong verb form
it has
cheaper
price than imported Add an article
a cheaper
one
as transport expenses eliminated
. Another plus is that, it Add a missing verb
are eliminated
produce
more job opportunities for the local Change the verb form
produces
people
in production
of Add an article
the production
food
and selling it to customers. Moreover
, one
can enjoy the fresh fruits and vegetable
which directly come to local markets from Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
farm
. Add an article
the farm
As a result
, this
can boost the
local economic growth and reduce Correct article usage
apply
pollution
of Correct article usage
the pollution
environment
.
Add an article
the environment
However
, demerits can not be unseen, if food
will
not imported Verb problem
is
then
one
can not enjoy all fruits
and vegetables which grown around the globe. Correct article usage
the fruits
In addition
, some places where vegetables and fruite
Correct your spelling
fruit
fruits
are not produce
Change the verb form
are not produced
are not producing
due to
their geographical and climate reason. At
some place Change preposition
In
food
requirement is much more than locally produced crops because of high
population Correct article usage
the high
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
time
import of Correct your spelling
the
food
become requisite
.
Correct article usage
a requisite
To sum up
, eating locally produced food
bring
both pros and cons. Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
According to
me, import
and export Correct article usage
the import
if
Correct your spelling
of
food
should be done but only for needy people
. However
, environment
and economy Correct article usage
the environment
is
Change the verb form
are
muvh
more Correct your spelling
much
import
than eating Replace the word
important
variety
of fruits and vegetables. Add an article
a variety
Thus
, i
believe Change the capitalization
I
merits
of Correct article usage
the merits
this
idea outweigh the demerits.Submitted by vivekchovatiya8 on
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