The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The proffered four pie charts provide information about the proportion of
Yemen
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and Italy's
population
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in three
age
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groups in 2000 and projections for 2050. At first glance, it is readily noticeable that children aged 0-14 contributed the highest proportion in
Yemen
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while
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people aged 15-59 dominated the fraction in 2000.
In addition
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, their projections for 2050 are predicted to rise increasingly. Looking at the chart, the
age
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group
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of 0-14 in
Yemen
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experienced a dominant position with 50,1%.
In contrast
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, the vast majority
population
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recorded in Italy is in the
age
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group
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of 15-59, making up almost two-thirds. It was followed by the
age
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group
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of 15-59 as the second rank. Interestingly, the lowest fraction came to the
group
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aged more than sixty in
Yemen
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, it was much lower than in Italy which comprised nearly a quarter
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. In terms of projections, it is estimated to soar particularly the
population
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of the
age
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group
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of 15-59 in both countries, both made up 57.3% and 46.2% respectively. The commonality data followed by the
age
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of
group
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60+ which increased as well.
However
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, in Italy, the
population
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of the
age
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group
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of 0-15 decreased by 3%
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in
Yemen
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rose slightly to 5.7% in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, population, age, group with synonyms.
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