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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the histrory of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #histrory #house #research
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increasingly
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 of
people
 in many places have some curiosities on finding the
history
 of their living
house
. In my opinion,
this
 finding
history
 trend is so popular right now because some movies
theory
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 on
people
's
house
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 and
people
 currently like to talk about their stories online.
Initially
, one of the most evident reasons why
people
 delicate time
to research
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about
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their properties is because
the
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of the
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 inspiration in some movies, especially
in
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those
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thriller ones, making them really curious about is there any treasures in their
home
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. Take the
surban
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urban
turban
 in the US,
for example
, there
are
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 almost the same structure of
houses
, which can be used
at
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for at
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 least
in
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50 years.
Houses
 with dark basements and attics are very similar to what
happend
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happened
 in the films.
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,
after
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watching these sorts of stories inspired
t'the
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the
explorers'
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explorers
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 to check on their
houses'
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house's
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history
.
Secondly
, another reason for
this
 phenomenon could be the new interest of
the
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society
on
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in
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 social media, which causes some young
people
tend
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to create topics for everyone to debate on
internet
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, and of
course
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course,
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 if there
something
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is something
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 intriguing about their
house
, they will
definately
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definitely
 take
this
 straight to the post.
Lastly
, I believe the best way to answer
to
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this
 puzzle is to ask their
neighbors
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neighbours
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. Some older
people
, who have spent almost their lives in the same
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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, can know better than anyone else. They may acknowledge some of the previous owners and even their stories. They properly notice if there
any
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unsual
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unusual
thing
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things
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 in their areas. In conclusion, some movies or tv series are
appealled
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appealed
appalled
people
due to
its
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their
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myterious
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mysterious
 theory about the
house
along with
 the
increasingly
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of
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young generation
love
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 to bring their life on
internet
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, making the finding about
history
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the history
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about
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of
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 their
houses
 in line
with
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with them
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. To get to know more clearly young
people
 should choose to ask the elderly in their neighborhood
help
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 them out.
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