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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some transport fruit and vegetables to some contries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opion.

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Over the past decade, the increasing demand
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 transporting fruits and vegetables throughout the world never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Some may support
thay
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that
air
 freight is
also
 an economical means to meet the above needs
while
 others give an opposite argument toward its costly price and negative effects caused by using it as a method
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 export and import of agricultural products. To the best of my knowledge, I'm of the opinion that it is an immensely debatable question to be analysed in both contrary aspects before concluding that supporting
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air
transportation
 is reasonable and practical. Delivery by plane
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 been popular
using
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 to
transportation
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 crops to countries where are lacking of plants. It was considered as a good trend, but the reserve is
also
 agreed by some people. My essay will demonstrate why many encourage
this
 tendency
while
 others believe that there are more useful methods for transferring. In the first place, the aircraft is
pondered as
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 a
transportation
 which has incredible speed. Thanks to the rapid increase of
freight
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 shipping industry, airliners are not only utilized for human travel but
also
 transit
foods
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 and
cargoes
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.
This
 means when an area or religion
suffer
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 from famine or unsuitable weather for crops, transmission by airlines is one of the best solutions to tackle the problem.
Additionally
, advanced countries like Russia, China or America have numerous plans for trading and exporting purposes.
For instance
, China spends less attention on agriculture
due to
 the convenience of
an
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aircraft contributes are remarkable to solving
this
 problem In other ways, the airlines
itself
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,
contains
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 several
of
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demerits, especially environmental problems. The activations of engines in
plane
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planes
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 require tonnes of fuel like
coals
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coal
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, oil,
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,
thus
 it is the reason why people rejected using it for transmissions regardless of
its
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 favourable attributes.
A research
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 held in California reported that 27% of carbon dioxide released into
atmosphere
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affect
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 the
air
 quality of numerous countries.
This
 immense amount of toxic chemical substances emitted into the
air
 is what needs to be
concerned
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 more than famine and crop losses. In conclusion, aircraft
contributes
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huge
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 to
freight
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transportation
 industry, but the backwoods of airline transit were
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thus
it
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 should not overused.
Otherwise
, the world will face
a
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environmental degradation leading to various consequences.

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