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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The
chart
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 represents
that
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what
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 Anthropology graduates from
single
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a single
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 university did after completing their undergraduate program. The table displays the salaries of the Anthropologists in job
subsequently
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 five years.
Overall
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, it is clear from the pie
chart
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 that the
distination
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destination
 of Anthropology graduates from one
universities
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university
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 has different
work
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such
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 as full-time, part-time,part-time
work
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 combined with postgrad study, unemployed and unknown.
Similarly
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, the table provides a
clean
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clear
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 idea about the employment types regarded with salary ranges in terms of percentage.
Firstly
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, when it comes to
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the pir
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pir
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pie
chart
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full time
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full-time
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work
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has occupied
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occupies
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 half of the
chart
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 with
percentage
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a percentage
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 of 52%, part-time
work
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 involves 15%,
12
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and 12
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% for the unemployed employees.
In addition
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, the hob of full-time postgrad study and not known occupied a space of 8%.
Whereas
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 , the least part part-time job combined with postgrad study involves
5
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a 5
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% share.
Secondly
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, there are three different types of employment
such
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 as freelance consultants, government sector and private companies.
However
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, each has different salary ranges inclusive of
persentage
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percentage
 after five years of
work
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. Apart from private companies, freelance consultants and
government
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the government
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 sector have
approximately
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an approximately
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 similar percentage of growth and
for
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in
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 the long run, it is higher
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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