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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits an vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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modern society, there are some
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 about the
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about
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aircraft
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 were
use
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for
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 transport
fruits
 and
vegetble
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vegetables
vegetable
 to some nations where
difficlt
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difficult
 to plant and grow or out of seasons.Many individuals agree it
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good idea.
However
, others
oject
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object
reject
 it.
this
 essay will give my point of view about two
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 and give my opinion about it.
To begin
 with, people believe that trading
of
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food items is not
benefical
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beneficial
 because they think both
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th qality
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the quality
 of vegetables and
fruits
 is sent to other nations
while
 citizen of products which is the main reason.
Thus
,
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 ought to control the quality
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systemand
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system and
 try to
mainain
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maintain
 a system of system transportation of food.
On the other hand
,
this
 idea of exporting food by
airpline
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aeroplane
airline
 is
appriciated
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appreciated
 by some. Because it
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 multiple to the countries.
For instance
, China is the largest exporter of
fruits
 and
vegetable
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vegetables
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 in
world
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 and
this
 helped China
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become
 financially strong.
Secondly
, it
brodders
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borders
brooders
horizons
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 of exporting and importing
fruits
 and
vegetable
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vegetables
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 to places where
such
 are not available
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 people among
nation
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the nation
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. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, there is
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 increase in sending
fruits
 and vegetables by air to other countries.
Although
, others think it has more benefits. I believe it can
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 us to
bring
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 a good relationship
wih
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with
 other nations.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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