Task one, you have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after six years old child. Write a letter to the parent,in your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ. Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

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Dear Sir, I am writing in response to the advertisement with regard to your
apeal
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appeal
for recruiting someone as a child nurse. I am a professional nurse with a degree certificate from one of the most reputable universities, and
heve
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recently moved to your town for
living
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a living
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;
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, I have been looking for the exact same kind of job as you offered. Since, the major proportion of my working experience is in the field of
children
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education, specifically of those aged between 4 to 6, I found
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a proper choice for
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post.
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, I have two younger siblings with whom I have an age gap of 8 and 10 years respectively, so I
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had been taken responsible for their education until the time I started my independent life as an adult. Despite my main career as a nurse, I have a great passion for
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, so most of my leisure time is spent
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visiting art galleries, going to concerts and watching movies in
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the cinema
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as well. That would give me an insight
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the
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social matters, making me more compatible with the diversity in children's behaviour. With all the above-mentioned
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, I hope you consider me as a suitable choice for the job position. I look forward to hearing from you, Yours faithfully, Tom
Shelbey
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Shelby
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Ensure that you address the reader by their proper title and name.
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Provide more specific details and examples to support your reasons for wanting the job.
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Explain how your skills and experience make you suitable for the role of a child nurse.
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Rephrase the sentence to correct the grammar: 'Hence, I have been looking for the exact same kind of job as you offered.'
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Provide more specific examples of how your passion for arts would benefit your role as a child nurse.
coherence cohesion
Use a more appropriate closing for a formal letter, such as 'Yours sincerely,' or 'Yours faithfully,'
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Expand on your response and provide more details about your leisure activities in Australia.
lexical resource
Use a variety of vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance the overall lexical resource.
grammatical range and accuracy
Proofread the letter to correct errors in spelling, grammar, and punctuation.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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