Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Happiness

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is a very interesting idea to wrap your head around when you think about it deeply, what does it mean it

mean

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to be happy,

lets

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define what we mean by

happiness

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, let's say

happiness

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means that you feel joy, you feel accomplished, you feel content, let us say

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what

happiness

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means to us for

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context and for most human context, so would I say

wealth

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can make me feel these things and these emotions? I think all of us would agree and unanimously say yes, we can all feel

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when we have

wealth

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wealth

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in terms of health, in terms of relationships, in terms of having finances when you have

wealth

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(to have in excess) in some or all these aspects, you most definitely can feel happy, now the question is are you

quaranteed

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guaranteed

happiness

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when you have

wealth

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? I would beg to differ in

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case,

cause

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there are so many factors that are involved

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you

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being happy that we can not just suggest that

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one universal factor(

wealth

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) can guarantee

happiness

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. Other things to consider would be how you got your

wealth

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, depending on the situation around how you acquired your

wealth

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you might not be so happy to have it, If you lost all your loved ones in the process of acquiring

wealth

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, you might not be so happy. Another thing to consider would be

mainting

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maintaining

the

wealth

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having to process the thought of

mainting

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maintaining

the

wealth

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and not wanting to lose

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thing you have can

also

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take away

you

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joy. The inability to be satisfied with the amount of

wealth

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you have and the desire to always want more

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this

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could

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be another source of discontent and lack of

happiness

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. And in

conclusion

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I would want to share the words of a very famous man from a very famous book who was very wealthy, his name was

king

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Solomon and he said, I am

praphrasing

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paraphrasing

here "in all that I have acquired all of it has been vanity upon vanity", so even he wasn't

quaranted

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guaranteed

happines

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happiness

with all

wealth

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and that answers our question.

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Oct 25, 2023

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2
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

wealth
happiness
emotional well-being
financial status
interpersonal relationships
personal fulfillment
material possessions
stress and anxiety
cultural differences
collectivist cultures
social bonds
true happiness
inner peace
contentment
mindfulness
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