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Some say cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions for tourists. Others say this is the only way to save such traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that historical background and cultural
heritage
 enable countries to attract more tourists to the country. In
this
 regard, some
people
 believe that using cultural
traditions
 for economic benefit can harm the tradition itself. Opponents of
this
 idea, including myself, suggest that monetizing their
culture
 would have economic and social advantages. From my perspective, it is vital for nations to share their cultural
heritage
 to be in
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 with the globalizing world. Many
people
 believe that tourism ruins
heritage
. Proponents of
this
 view claim that
money making
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 process using
culture
 and
traditions
 might lead to the
lost
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the
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 uniqueness of its
culture
.
This
 process may include
marketing
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 strategy, which promotes the tradition as a product, not a value. Since the value turns into
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, it becomes ordinary which can be easily experienced without comprehension of its origins.
On the other hand
, I am in agreement with those who argue that monetizing
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cultural
traditions
 is one of the best ways to save them. It is crucial for small nations
who
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 recently re-established their independence to come back to lost identity.
For example
, countries
such
 as my homeland – Kazakhstan
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on the way
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 returning to
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 origins, which was prohibited under
the
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Soviet power. Within the 30 years of
independence
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 our own folklore has been exhibited in the stylish clothes and indi-pop songs. These products have become the driver of our intellectual economy and attract more international followers.
Consequently
, more young
people
 in Kazakhstan are In conclusion, some
people
 blame
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 agenda when
culture
 and
traditions
 are considered as a source of profits,
while
 opponents claim that cultural
heritage
 can be saved and developed with the help of marketing and tourist attraction. From my perspective, in the age of globalization the only way
of distinguishing
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 own
traditions
 is
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being
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 attractive and competitive in the market of cultural products.
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