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Some say cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions for tourists. Others say this is the only way to save such traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that historical background and cultural
heritage
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 enable countries to attract more tourists to the country. In
this
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 regard, some
people
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 believe that using cultural
traditions
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 for economic benefit can harm the tradition itself. Opponents of
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 idea, including myself, suggest that monetizing their
culture
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 would have economic and social advantages. From my perspective, it is vital for nations to share their cultural
heritage
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 to be in
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 with the globalizing world. Many
people
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 believe that tourism ruins
heritage
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. Proponents of
this
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 view claim that
money making
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 process using
culture
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 and
traditions
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 might lead to the
lost
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the
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 uniqueness of its
culture
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.
This
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 process may include
marketing
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a marketing
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 strategy, which promotes the tradition as a product, not a value. Since the value turns into
product
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, it becomes ordinary which can be easily experienced without comprehension of its origins.
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, I am in agreement with those who argue that monetizing
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cultural
traditions
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 is one of the best ways to save them. It is crucial for small nations
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 recently re-established their independence to come back to lost identity.
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, countries
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 as my homeland – Kazakhstan
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on the way
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 returning to
its
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their
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 origins, which was prohibited under
the
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Soviet power. Within the 30 years of
independence
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independence,
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 our own folklore has been exhibited in the stylish clothes and indi-pop songs. These products have become the driver of our intellectual economy and attract more international followers.
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, more young
people
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 in Kazakhstan are In conclusion, some
people
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 blame
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 agenda when
culture
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 and
traditions
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 are considered as a source of profits,
while
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 opponents claim that cultural
heritage
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 can be saved and developed with the help of marketing and tourist attraction. From my perspective, in the age of globalization the only way
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 own
traditions
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 is
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by being
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being
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 attractive and competitive in the market of cultural products.
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