The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.
The Pie chart
illutrates
Correct your spelling
illustrates
expenses
of Correct article usage
the expenses
american
citizens in the year 1966.
most of the Change the capitalization
American
citiznes
spent Correct your spelling
citizens
thier
money on food which is 44 Correct your spelling
their
percent
. and the second highest was spent on cars which is 23 percent
.
however
, least
amount of expenditure was Correct article usage
the least
done
on Verb problem
spent
Computers
which is
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was
percent
, and then
it was book
which Fix the agreement mistake
books
is
6 Wrong verb form
was
percent
.
pepole
of Correct your spelling
People
america
spent Change the capitalization
America
their
10 Correct pronoun usage
apply
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
of
furniture, 9 Change preposition
on
percent
on petrol and 7 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
on Change the spelling
per cent
Add an article
the restaurant
a restaurant
restaurant
. in Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
comclusion
the highest expenditure was on food and the lowest was Correct your spelling
conclusion
computers
.
as there was less technology most people did not use their money for Change preposition
on computers
computers
. if it was now computers
wuld
have some good percentage.Correct your spelling
would
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