The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.

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illutrates

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illustrates

expenses

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the expenses

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american

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American

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citizens in the year 1966. most of the

citiznes

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citizens

spent

thier

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their

money on food which is 44

percent

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. and the second highest was spent on cars which is 23

percent

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however

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least

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the least

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amount of expenditure was

done

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spent

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Computers

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which

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was

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percent

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, and

then

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it was

book

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books

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which

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was

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percent

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pepole

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People

america

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America

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spent

their

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apply

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percent

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per cent

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furniture, 9

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percent

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per cent

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on petrol and 7

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percent

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per cent

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the restaurant

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restaurant

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restaurants

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. in

comclusion

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conclusion

the highest expenditure was on food and the lowest was

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computers

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on computers

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. as there was less technology most people did not use their money for

computers

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. if it was now

computers

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wuld

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would

have some good percentage.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

114 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

expenditure
budget
housing
transportation
food and drinks
healthcare
education
categories
percentage
financial burden
prioritize
mobility
services
sprawling
indulging
culinary experiences
groceries
importance
coverage
allocation
miscellaneous expenses
entertainment
personal care
leisure activities

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The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.

People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kinds of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that children should only read academic books. Others believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.