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The line graph given illustrates the number of people who travel to work by three separate means of transport in the UK from 1970 to 2030.

The line graph given illustrates the number of people who travel to work by three separate means of transport in the UK from 1970 to 2030.
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The graph gives information about how many British travellers go to their workplace using
car
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a car
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,
bus
 or
train
 in a 60-year period.
Overall
, the number of cars
using
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used
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 as a means of transport is far more than two other types.
Also
, the figure for trains
increase
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increased
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 despite
its
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their
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 unpopularity during the first 30 years, in comparison with
the
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apply
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bus
use
. In 1970, more than 5
million
of
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apply
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UK citizens
tend
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tended
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 to
use
 their private transport to get to work,
while
this
 number was around 4 and just over 2
millions
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million
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 for
bus
 and
train
,
respectivelly
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respectively
.
This
 number remained approximately the same until 1980 when the
use
 of
bus
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buses
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 started to fall and in
compair
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compare
, people began to commute
with
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by
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 trains and cars more than before. By 2000, the
populatin
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population
 of passengers using car and
train
 in Britain were nearly 7 and 3
million
poeple
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people
.
This
 figure
was fix
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was fixed
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 for
thr
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the
 next 10 years. In 2010, the figure for
train
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trains
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 started a rapid rise reaching just under 5
million
 users. During
last
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the last
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 30 years, cars become more popular among Britains with nearly 9
million
 passengers,
while
 the
use
 of
bus fall
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buses has fallen
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 to under 3
million
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, train, use, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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