This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
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The line graph demonstrates the recycling habits of paper and cardboard,
glass
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containers
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, aluminium cans, and plastics in a particular country
during
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from
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1982 to 2010. The data is measured in
percentage
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. It is crystal clear that , in 1982 the recycling rate of paper and cardboard was around 65
percent
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slightly
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increased
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to 70
percent
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in 1986 but again
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dropped
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down by nearly five
percent
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in the next
year
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.
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, after 1990 it
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to and reached
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80
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percent
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in 1994. But from 1994, it started
decline
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and reached again on 70
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percent
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in the
last
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given
year
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, in the initial
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the
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glass
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containers
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recycling was quite popular fifty
percent
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glass
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of glass
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containers
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recycled
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were recycled
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in that
year
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as
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in the following two years it declined to 40
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.
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,
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in
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1990 the recycling rate of
glass
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containers
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started increasing steadily and
reach
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by
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twenty
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percent
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in 2010. Moving
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, in 1986 aluminium cans started recycling with nearly five
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percent
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which was slightly expanded during the whole
year
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and
in
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at
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the end
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year
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year,
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the proportion goes to 45
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percent
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.
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, in 1990 a new material
introduced
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in the list of recycling namely plastics . It started recycling around five
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percent
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and steadily
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increased
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during the period but remained below twenty
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percent
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. To recap it is concluded that, during the whole period proportion of
recycling
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recycled
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paper and
cardboards
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cardboard
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always remained highest
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than
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others.
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Although
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,
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plastics recycling rate remained
least
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lowest
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from 1990 to 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, containers, percent, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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