The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.

The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.
The pie charts display the proportion of money spent on Food,Cars,Petrol,Restaurants,Furniture,Computer and Books in 1966.
Overall
, it is evident from the diagram that a major percentage was spent on Food,
while
the least amount was spent on buying books.
To begin
with, In 1996, Slightly more than
two fifths
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of the total was spent on purchasing Food hitting the peak of the chart,
while
a small amount was on computers, hitting the bottom of the diagram at 1%.
However
,a significant proportion was
alloted
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allocated
allowed
to
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the car
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car
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as well at 23%, making it the second most purchased item.
Furthermore
, in the same year, the
figure
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for books and restaurants were almost equivalent at 6% and 7% respectively.
Also
, furniture and petrol had a similar pattern as
it
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they
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made up a minority at 10% and 9% each and they were the least
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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that
were
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was
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bought in the USA.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • budget
  • housing
  • transportation
  • food and drinks
  • healthcare
  • education
  • categories
  • percentage
  • financial burden
  • prioritize
  • mobility
  • services
  • sprawling
  • indulging
  • culinary experiences
  • groceries
  • importance
  • coverage
  • allocation
  • miscellaneous expenses
  • entertainment
  • personal care
  • leisure activities
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