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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

The
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Britain’s
elderies
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elderly
 will frequently spend their entire life in a nursing
home
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accompany
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 by fellow friends
with
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of
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 similar age.
However
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, it is now being questioned who is the right person
taking
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care
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 of the charges in
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care
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the care
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 services facility. From my point of view, I believe that the family should
in
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 charge of all the
expanses
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expenses
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 needed for their
parents
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there
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that
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 I will elaborate
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further
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on further
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 in the following paragraph.
To begin
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 with, it is nearly impossible to cover all the needs of
significant
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a significant
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 number of adults by the government. Each country has limited annual income and outcome
use
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 for several aspects of
country’s
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 aspects,
such
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the
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Britain.
Furthermore
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, nursing
home
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 is not the only concern of Britain, in fact, many other demands that fulfill the
citizens
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citizen's
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 daily life processes which are construction and facility improvement. If a country has to pay for all of the nursing fees, other beneficial aspects will obviously be uncovered.
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,
the
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juveniles should be responsible
in
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 taking
care
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 of their
parents
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 as a reason of that their
parents
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 are those who
born
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 and
raise
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 them from
infant
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. As a reward, their family, especially their child should take
care
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 of them as they get old. Many ways are available to
thankful
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 to their
parents
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,
such
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 as paying
their
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for their
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 needs in the nursing
home
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.
For instance
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, a successful man is successful
due to
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 his
parents
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’ effort in satisfying the expenditure for education and guidance.
Subsequently
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, he will be the one who will be responsible
of
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 their
parents
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’ daily basis in the nursing
home
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. In a nutshell, all the expenditures of the non-productive age
parents
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 in the nursing house should be covered by their
housholds
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households
due to
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 limited federal money and as the juveniles’ responsibility.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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