In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?
The
Britain’s Correct article usage
apply
elderies
will frequently spend their entire life in a nursing Correct your spelling
elderly
home
accompany
by fellow friends Change the form of the verb
accompanied
with
similar age. Change preposition
of
However
, it is now being questioned who is the right person taking
Change the verb form
to take
care
of the charges in care
services facility. From my point of view, I believe that the family should Correct article usage
the care
in
charge of all the Add a missing verb
be in
expanses
needed for their Correct your spelling
expenses
parents
there
Rephrase
apply
that
I will elaborate Correct word choice
which
further
in the following paragraph.
Change preposition
on further
To begin
with, it is nearly impossible to cover all the needs of significant
number of adults by the government. Each country has limited annual income and outcome Change the article
a significant
the significant
use
for several aspects of Change the form of the verb
used
country’s
aspects, Correct article usage
the country’s
such
as the
Britain. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, nursing home
is not the only concern of Britain, in fact, many other demands that fulfill the citizens
daily life processes which are construction and facility improvement. If a country has to pay for all of the nursing fees, other beneficial aspects will obviously be uncovered.
Change to a genitive case
citizen's
citizens'
On the other hand
, the
juveniles should be responsible Correct article usage
apply
in
taking Change preposition
for
care
of their parents
as a reason of that their parents
are those who born
and Add a missing verb
were born
raise
them from Wrong verb form
raised
infant
. As a reward, their family, especially their child should take Replace the word
infancy
care
of them as they get old. Many ways are available to thankful
to their Add a missing verb
be thankful
parents
, such
as paying their
needs in the nursing Change preposition
for their
home
. For instance
, a successful man is successful due to
his parents
’ effort in satisfying the expenditure for education and guidance. Subsequently
, he will be the one who will be responsible of
their Change the preposition
for
parents
’ daily basis in the nursing home
.
In a nutshell, all the expenditures of the non-productive age parents
in the nursing house should be covered by their housholds
Correct your spelling
households
due to
limited federal money and as the juveniles’ responsibility.Submitted by naufalandhikapratama on
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