In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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Britain’s
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will frequently spend their entire life in a nursing
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by fellow friends
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similar age.
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, it is now being questioned who is the right person
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care
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of the charges in
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services facility. From my point of view, I believe that the family should
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charge of all the
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needed for their
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I will elaborate
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in the following paragraph.
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with, it is nearly impossible to cover all the needs of
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number of adults by the government. Each country has limited annual income and outcome
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for several aspects of
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aspects,
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Britain.
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is not the only concern of Britain, in fact, many other demands that fulfill the
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daily life processes which are construction and facility improvement. If a country has to pay for all of the nursing fees, other beneficial aspects will obviously be uncovered.
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juveniles should be responsible
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of their
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as a reason of that their
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are those who
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and
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them from
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. As a reward, their family, especially their child should take
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of them as they get old. Many ways are available to
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to their
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,
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needs in the nursing
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.
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his
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’ effort in satisfying the expenditure for education and guidance.
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, he will be the one who will be responsible
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their
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’ daily basis in the nursing
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. In a nutshell, all the expenditures of the non-productive age
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in the nursing house should be covered by their
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households
due to
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limited federal money and as the juveniles’ responsibility.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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