The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.
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line
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graphic depicts the
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crimes
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crime
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occurances
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occurrences
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newport
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Newport
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city centre
from
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between
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2003 and 2012. The highest
rate
crime
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of crime
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type in shows for burglary with approximately 3700
incidents
that
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occured
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occurred
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2004 starting with less
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3500 and
then
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rapidly
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downfall
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the
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2008.
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trend
fluctuate
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for car theft with
a
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the
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highest
rate
ranging in 2600
number of
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unfortunate
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following
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followed
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with
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the lowest
rate
in 2008 with only 2000.
while
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crime
was for robbery, with a mere stable fluctuation of
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, in only starts with 600
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incidents
and in 2012 at just the same amount of
crime
rate
.
overall
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incidents
in
newport
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Newport
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city would be in the year
of
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apply
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2004 with burglary ranging more than 3700
incidents
and the lowest and safest time was 2008, showing the major drawbacks for all
number
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numbers
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of
incidents
occurances
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occurrences
occurrence
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, crime, incidents, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • recorded
  • trends
  • criminal activity
  • categories
  • theft
  • assault
  • vandalism
  • graph
  • x-axis
  • y-axis
  • number of crimes
  • visual representation
  • changes
  • crime rates
  • fluctuating pattern
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