The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.
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The line graph illustrates the amount consumed
on
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margarine,
butter
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as well as
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lowfat
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low-fat
low fat
and reduced spreads between 1981 and 2007.
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, all spreads had declined towards the end of the
period
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. There was only
butter
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and margarine
in
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at
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the beginning of the
period
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and
lowfat
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low-fat
low fat
and reduced spreads joined the consumer list in the middle of the
period
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.
In
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the beginning of 1981,
butter
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was the highest. It reached its peak of 159
grams
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then
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and then
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dropped consistently. By the year 1991, margarine replaced
butter
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and had 100
grams
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consumption
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that remained stable until 1996. In the same year, it started dropping
,
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but was still the most consumed spread towards the end of the
period
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.
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,
low fat
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and reduced spreads that started later had a different trend. It climbed from 10
grams
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in 1996 to 81
grams
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in 2001 which was the highest growth among all other spreads. Despite the rapid growth, it
also
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dipped in 2007 and had the least consumption.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words butter, period, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • spreads
  • increased
  • decreased
  • stable
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • per capita
  • remarkable
  • peaked
  • experienced
  • started
  • remained
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