Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food clothes and environment is likely to result in a society individuals who only think about their own wishes other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days, some people trust that give
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • sense of responsibility
  • consequences
  • mature decision-making skills
  • parental guidance
  • experience
  • wise decisions
  • excessive freedom
  • selfishness
  • compromise
  • societal cohesion
  • collective decisions
  • cooperation
  • personal freedom
  • capable individuals
  • considerate
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